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The Rise and Fall of Malus Sceleris (Comments)
I like it.
It's interesting to see that you made Malus a sympathetic character in the vein of a misguided Objectivist.
The only problem is that I didn't see an "Act of Ultimate Darkness"; Although it's quite obvious that Malus kicked the dog into the nearest domain when he killed his father, it's also quite obvious that from his point of view, it really wasn't an evil action. 25% powers check? Yes. Act Of Ultimate Darkness? No.
It's interesting to see that you made Malus a sympathetic character in the vein of a misguided Objectivist.
The only problem is that I didn't see an "Act of Ultimate Darkness"; Although it's quite obvious that Malus kicked the dog into the nearest domain when he killed his father, it's also quite obvious that from his point of view, it really wasn't an evil action. 25% powers check? Yes. Act Of Ultimate Darkness? No.
I am The Archangel of Night.
I am the Guardian of Shadow
I am the Vindicator of the Unknown
I am..Leliel.
I am the Guardian of Shadow
I am the Vindicator of the Unknown
I am..Leliel.
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Malus killing his father was one thing, but remember that he more or less allowed a portion of the local populace to die by charging an exhorbitant fee for a potential cure for the plague.
I guess my work isn.t very clear in that I wanted to show how Malus saw his actions as small, necessary steps toward his greater goal of reshaping Nosos into a mighty nation.
I admit to there being quite a bit of moral ambivalence at work here. But that's why he's lord of an island and not a core domain.
I guess my work isn.t very clear in that I wanted to show how Malus saw his actions as small, necessary steps toward his greater goal of reshaping Nosos into a mighty nation.
I admit to there being quite a bit of moral ambivalence at work here. But that's why he's lord of an island and not a core domain.