A Quiet Life: Gertrude Kingsley (comments)
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A Quiet Life: Gertrude Kingsley (comments)
Hey ho, feel free to leave any comments here if you wish. I'll just warn y'all that the title is a warning: this is going to be low on adventures.
His only real danger is if stupidity is contagious and lethal. In which case, we’re all dead…-Gertrude
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Doesn't matter to me in the least! Nice to see someone taking initiative and spinning a new tale.
I read what you have written twice and I kept having the words "budding sorceress" run through my mind... not too sure as to why. Nice job so far, and I shall be lurking in the shadows awaiting more.
I read what you have written twice and I kept having the words "budding sorceress" run through my mind... not too sure as to why. Nice job so far, and I shall be lurking in the shadows awaiting more.
[i]Seek not in the shadows, for there ye shall find secrets too terrible for mortal man to bear. [/i]
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Llana, I really like your characterizations. The details of how characters speak, how they act, the little gestures and incidents of their existence... it all weaves very nicely into the conversation and doesn't feel like it ever intrudes.
I'm looking forward to reading more, and hope you continue this story!
I'm looking forward to reading more, and hope you continue this story!
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Thank you.
@ HumanBing: I really do enjoy writing conversations; my personal bugbear is descriptive narrative. I have a hard time figuring out how to include details without making it look 'clunky' or added-on.
@JinnTolser: One of the things I love most about Ravenloft- and especially my beloved Zherisia- is how little is known about the magic and monsters which are prevalent there. And while they may live in a gothic world, I figure people don't necessarily know it or experience it as such for themselves.
@ HumanBing: I really do enjoy writing conversations; my personal bugbear is descriptive narrative. I have a hard time figuring out how to include details without making it look 'clunky' or added-on.
@JinnTolser: One of the things I love most about Ravenloft- and especially my beloved Zherisia- is how little is known about the magic and monsters which are prevalent there. And while they may live in a gothic world, I figure people don't necessarily know it or experience it as such for themselves.
His only real danger is if stupidity is contagious and lethal. In which case, we’re all dead…-Gertrude
So far (through six posts) living up to the title. The writing itself is technically sound, and the story is developing interestingly. I suspect that it will take several more chapters before I can say whether or not I like the story--as you of course are already aware, it's a tale of character development and it will therefore take time to see how the "seeds" planted early turn out. I can say that I'm enjoying the way it's going and that you do have a nice way with a dry turn of phrase that spices things up (I'm especially fond of the final line of Chapter 6; it brought a quick smile to my face).